Apr 24, 2011 11:40 PM GMT
Was super bored so I decided to give poetry a shot. Tell me your honest opinions of what you think or share your own stuff here if you'd like 
P.S. I appreciate criticism more than compliments to spare my feelings lol.
here it is
To share a heart,
and convey a feeling.
Is how we give our lives their meaning.
but how to share, what isn't there
is something I don't know.
While I'm searching, for it's trace
I stumble upon
a familiar place.
Somehow it's changed,
turned to a cell, deranged
but for which there are no bars.
Instead it seems
to be held in place
with self inflicted scars
And even though it's starved of love
I still feel it faintly beating,
my ephemeral joy, turned to grief
when I learn this too is fleeting.
I curse my jailer, but to no avail
because I'm left alone
rendered hollow, because I follow
a sin I cannot atone.

P.S. I appreciate criticism more than compliments to spare my feelings lol.
here it is
To share a heart,
and convey a feeling.
Is how we give our lives their meaning.
but how to share, what isn't there
is something I don't know.
While I'm searching, for it's trace
I stumble upon
a familiar place.
Somehow it's changed,
turned to a cell, deranged
but for which there are no bars.
Instead it seems
to be held in place
with self inflicted scars
And even though it's starved of love
I still feel it faintly beating,
my ephemeral joy, turned to grief
when I learn this too is fleeting.
I curse my jailer, but to no avail
because I'm left alone
rendered hollow, because I follow
a sin I cannot atone.