Poem I Wrote: Ode to time.

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    Oct 07, 2011 10:11 PM GMT
    Ode to time

    If time were something we could control
    it would live forever no matter how old
    A life of luxury lust and wonder

    Time is our limit without it we'd thrive
    Never be late or too early to arrive
    Our days would be of mystery
    Our days would have many stories

    If time wasn't a man made thing where would we be?

    If time wasn't of the essence would we have history?

    If time could be more than something on our watches
    Or a limiting factor of life's progression

    Could we relate it to the rise of Jesus' resurrection?

    if only time wasn't that one thing we can't control
    Then we'd be out to thrive and be told
    By elders who stay old
    To Youngsters who stay young

    That we live in a new era where time doesnt matter

    No story would be to long no poem to short

    It'd all be at ease with our hearts

    If time was something we could control





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    Oct 07, 2011 11:01 PM GMT
    Trust me the things i went through in my life theres many memories i wish i could just relive and pause at that time ive lost alot of people in life its not me being too young ive. lived through things most people dont til they are alot older, its all about experience with life haha and ive got plenty
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    Oct 07, 2011 11:39 PM GMT
    Nice to read... very interesting prose.. Quite modern in style icon_smile.gif I like it!
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    Jan 30, 2013 8:41 PM GMT
    Fact saidTrust me the things i went through in my life theres many memories i wish i could just relive and pause at that time ive lost alot of people in life its not me being too young ive. lived through things most people dont til they are alot older, its all about experience with life haha and ive got plenty


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    Jan 30, 2013 11:53 PM GMT
    Should add it to my RJ poetry thread...... icon_smile.gif
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    Jan 30, 2013 11:54 PM GMT
    Reading forced rhyme couplets hurts my eyes.
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    Jan 30, 2013 11:56 PM GMT
    Maybe it's me, but I didn't get it.