Short Erotic Story

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    Jul 20, 2012 8:37 PM GMT
    Hey guys just wondering if you guys think I should pursue this type of writing... would love to hear some opinions icon_smile.gif Don't mind the grammar.. is not my forte

    Mmmmmmmm, I would lick your nipples, then travel down that furry chest of yours down to your well groomed bush, slowly slide my tongue up your gorgeous shaft, teasing your head with my tongue. As I gaze up into your eyes, I take your endowment inside of my mouth as I flick my tongue while going up and down and I hear you moan for more.

    As you moan, your body shivers and you take my face and kiss it gently, bringing me back up so we are face to face. You slowly wrap your arms around me and I around you, as our tongues embrace slowly and in sync.

    All of a sudden you push me away, you grab my legs and put them behind my head. As I lay down you begin sucking my cock and take my balls in your mouth. You begin to swish them around, sucking hard as your mouth makes the popping noise. As you go back to my cock you lick your fingers and slowly insert them into my rosy tight ass. I moan, begging you to keep going, as you hit my G spot you insert 2 fingers, then 3, every increment making my body shake in ecstasy.

    You play with my ass making me moan " ya, right there! Right there!" As I am about to cum, you stop flip me on my back and a drip of sweat slides down my face and falls on top my hairy chest. you slowly lick my navel up to my chest and as you are about to kiss my lips you slowly go to my cheek and you whisper quietly into my ear " you want my cock inside your ass?" I slowly shake my head up and down. The look on his my face is as if i have tasted the best chocolate truffle in the world as you slide your cock inside of me. As you fuck me your balls smack against my ass *smack* *smack* *smack* I feel every inch of you as I look at this magnificent hairy man with the bear paw tattoo on his hair chest. I stroke my cock fighting the urge to not release just yet. A drip of sweat drops from your forehead as you stare into my eyes. You lean over, while your cock is puncturing my tight ass hole, and give me a passionate kiss, as I bite my lips.

    You fuck me faster and faster every second getting closer to releasing. I feel a swooshing feeling coming over me, as my ass contracts on your hard cock, I cum and shoot all over my chest, the head board, and my navel. The feeling takes me to a feeling of ultimate ecstasy, my eyes are closed whimpering from your cock still penetrating my ass. You slowly lick the cum off my chest and kiss me sharing my essence. you then, pulling out, sit on my stomach and cum all over me. your sexy body shaking from the rush. I look up at this sexy blue eyed man who is experiencing great pleasure. I smile as the cum shoots onto my face. I use my fingers and lick it all up, head to his cock and suck every last drop from your penis making you whimper to stop.

    We lay next to one another staring into each others eyes, naked, and we lightly kiss and cuddle till we fall a sleep arms wrapped around one another.
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    Jul 20, 2012 9:29 PM GMT
    Oh ya hope you guys enjoy ;)
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    Jul 20, 2012 10:35 PM GMT
    50 shades of RJ icon_neutral.gif
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    Jul 21, 2012 12:11 AM GMT
    I don't think it really requires great skill to write these types of stories. It really sells on Amazon though and you'd be surprised (I guess) at who buys it.

    Change the 'pov', add dialog, and continue to write. It's a good start.
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    Jul 21, 2012 12:24 AM GMT
    Gio_G saidI don't think it really requires great skill to write these types of stories. It really sells on Amazon though and you'd be surprised (I guess) at who buys it.

    Change the 'pov', add dialog, and continue to write. It's a good start.

    Agreed. Good start. I was taught when writing to include everything from the five senses: sight, audio, smell, taste and touch. You got the touching and sight. But whats he smell like? What does his furry chest taste like? Whats the room your in like?

    Sigh. I'm giving writing advice for smut.
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    Jul 21, 2012 5:59 PM GMT
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    Gio_G saidI don't think it really requires great skill to write these types of stories. It really sells on Amazon though and you'd be surprised (I guess) at who buys it.

    Change the 'pov', add dialog, and continue to write. It's a good start.

    Agreed. Good start. I was taught when writing to include everything from the five senses: sight, audio, smell, taste and touch. You got the touching and sight. But whats he smell like? What does his furry chest taste like? Whats the room your in like?

    Sigh. I'm giving writing advice for smut.


    Great advice guys! icon_smile.gif I like that idea of smell, taste and audio... I'll keep that in mind
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    Jul 21, 2012 7:43 PM GMT
    LMFAOicon_lol.gif
    Op....i'm so sorry..i really am..
    You have to get out more !!..

    ***** Alerting the others *****