Oright, Isaiah. I'm an independent filmmaker with several projects under my belt. Went to film school at the University Of Maryland. You can see some of my projects here.
Here's some feedback.. I'm gonna try and be gentle:
1. Your Kickstarter promo video.... doesn't work. The title cards make for wayyyyyy too much reading. And you don't leave them on screen long enough for them to be readable. I gave up reading that stuff after the third title card. Second, you're aiming to do a webseries.. and there's not one actual action scene in your promo.. No example of what your webseries could look like. Just endless title cards. This doesn't give *any* confidence to give you money. You've not shown me you can make a film. If I were you, I would scrap that video completely, get at least two local actors and just shoot a sample scene of your webseries (and do it competently). If you want an example of good Kickstarter promo video, look at the one called 'Xxist' on my Vimeo page link posted above.
2. You're asking for waayyyy too much money. 45 grand? Man, most indie filmmakers can pull what you're proposing for 5 grand!! Where is all that money going? Is there a budget breakdown anywhere that you can show how you're spending the money? I doubt you'll raise 45 grand on your first time on Kickstarter. Hell, I know competent indie filmmakers who have raised just 25 grand on their third Kickstarter project.
3. And your donation levels are all out of whack. You need 1$ and $5 levels. You need small donations because most people aren't gonna fork out $25 for this project as it sounds right now. You need to make your donation levels more realistic.
4. Please don't say that you're seeking to get on Netflix, Hulu or Logo. This... is gonna go on Youtube, period. Unless you're an accomplished filmmaker, this is your first time out of the bat, you're not gonna hit the big time. Keep your distribution aspirations realistic.
If I were you, I would re-shoot the Kickstarter video, tweak the donation levels, and rewrite all that stuff about getting on Netflix/Hulu/Logo.