Should I keep this story or trash it?

  • Posted by a hidden member.
    Log in to view his profile

    Jul 21, 2013 5:37 PM GMT
    So before I start let me say I took down the Kickstarter because I wanted to shorten the duration and change the name since I came up with a better poster idea. I also got someone who might help me shoot a trailer for it. But anyway this one of the sketches I wrote for it. I was thinking about scrapping it because it makes the episode longer than usual and it's not very funny. It was supposed to be about bullying in schools but it eventually went a different way.

    I was wondering whether I should keep it or scrap it and use it for something else later. What do y'all think? It's not very long:

    https://docs.google.com/file/d/0B7KeEcXRgpjKdkJZSWJfYkhTR2M/edit?usp=sharing
  • HottJoe

    Posts: 21366

    Jul 21, 2013 6:03 PM GMT
    Keep it! I love this story. The ending brought tears to my eyes.
  • Posted by a hidden member.
    Log in to view his profile

    Jul 21, 2013 6:04 PM GMT
    HottJoe saidKeep it! I love this story. The ending brought tears to my eyes.


    You don't think it was too formulaic?
  • HottJoe

    Posts: 21366

    Jul 21, 2013 6:24 PM GMT
    TransparentUnity said
    HottJoe saidKeep it! I love this story. The ending brought tears to my eyes.


    You don't think it was too formulaic?

    No, because for me the characters are compelling enough to hold my interest. It's a relatable story, and it doesn't have the bitterness and cynicism that often detracts from gay characters. These are characters you want to love, which makes it worthwhile to read.
  • Posted by a hidden member.
    Log in to view his profile

    Jul 21, 2013 6:51 PM GMT
    HottJoe said
    TransparentUnity said
    HottJoe saidKeep it! I love this story. The ending brought tears to my eyes.


    You don't think it was too formulaic?

    No, because for me the characters are compelling enough to hold my interest. It's a relatable story, and it doesn't have the bitterness and cynicism that often detracts from gay characters. These are characters you want to love, which makes it worthwhile to read.


    I was trying to go for sympathetic characters. There was no reason any of the characters had to be mean or bitter or cynical. Corwin is a tragic character. He starts off as a pathetic victim and ends as someone who should know better but doesn't.
  • Posted by a hidden member.
    Log in to view his profile

    Jul 21, 2013 9:42 PM GMT
    [quote][cite]HottJoe said[/cite]
    TransparentUnity said
    HottJoe saidKeep it! I love this story. The ending brought tears to my eyes.


    You don't think it was too formulaic?

    No, because for me the characters are compelling enough to hold my interest. It's a relatable story, and it doesn't have the bitterness and cynicism that often detracts from gay characters. These are characters you want to love, which makes it worthwhile to read.[/quote]

    *coughs politely and winks at TransparentUnity*
  • Posted by a hidden member.
    Log in to view his profile

    Jul 21, 2013 9:45 PM GMT


    Excellent observation from HottJoe.
  • Posted by a hidden member.
    Log in to view his profile

    Jul 22, 2013 2:11 AM GMT
    meninlove said[quote][cite]HottJoe said[/cite]
    TransparentUnity said
    HottJoe saidKeep it! I love this story. The ending brought tears to my eyes.


    You don't think it was too formulaic?

    No, because for me the characters are compelling enough to hold my interest. It's a relatable story, and it doesn't have the bitterness and cynicism that often detracts from gay characters. These are characters you want to love, which makes it worthwhile to read.[/quote]

    *coughs politely and winks at TransparentUnity*


    Lol again Glinda and Sena were essentially myself and I am bitter and cynical so hey. Lol when I base a character off of myself you get a moody bitch.