Made video I Made, I wanna be a comedian

  • St00p_Kid

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    Aug 26, 2009 5:39 PM GMT
    Any feedback is appreciated, think I might have what it takes?
  • St00p_Kid

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    Aug 26, 2009 5:39 PM GMT
    Oh yeah... might wanna put the link up http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ek7-iHnYtlw
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    Aug 26, 2009 5:59 PM GMT

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ek7-iHnYtlw

    Don't fidget so much. If you are going to sell the whole hot bi thing, make the t-shirt a tank top. Hey, if one or two of the judges are female or gay, you've half got them before you say anything. Be a little more confident, really sell yourself and drop all the parts where you say you might be good.

    The part where you said you were bi and like everything was endearing.

    If you're going to play the guitar, play it, that could be one of your main selling point unless you turn it into a joke. Besides that I would suggest you include a short sample of your stand-up and change the background to something a tad more uplifting and well lit, like outside or on a patio, somewhere "youthful" and Mtv.
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    Aug 26, 2009 6:01 PM GMT
    GuiltyGear said


    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ek7-iHnYtlw


    Haha thanks
  • St00p_Kid

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    Aug 26, 2009 7:11 PM GMT
    Good tips.... but not sure if they want someone completely confident, I fidget a lot in general and when I get nervous, i'm not trying to sell something I'm not, I'm just putting myself out there and if they want it they can take it, if they don't they can leave it.
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    Aug 26, 2009 7:26 PM GMT
    Sorry, friend, but when you said "There'll never be a boring moment" is when you lost me. The WHOLE THING, up to that point, WAS boring.

    Don't sit there in your room on your webcam TELLING us about how funny you are and how you want to make people laugh; SHOW US. Start out as if you're already on stage in the middle of your act. If you go onstage and start to tell us about yourself the way you did on the clip, nobody will be interested.

    Stand-up comedy is VERY DIFFICULT, especially for a beginner. The only exceptions I can think of are Robin Williams and Bill Cosby, and maybe George Carlin. They TOOK CONTROL of the room as soon as they walked out on that stage. From your video, you don't seem to show any of that kind of charisma, sorry to say.

    There are many approaches to stand-up: you can do the Henny Youngman thing and tell one-liners. You can do the Cosby thing, and tell stories from your own life that are funny, as well as universally honest. Many of us still laugh at Cosby's old routines because his childhood is similar to our own (in my generation, anyway). You can do the George Carlin or Eddie Murphy thing, and make pithy and outrageous observations on real life. Or you can do a funny character, like Andy Kaufmann, Stephen Wright, or Howie Mandel. There are many ways to approach stand-up, but most important is to be confident, and have a LOT of material, or at least be very fast on your feet. You MUST control the room, and fidgeting, and allowing your ADD to control you, will cause your audience to lose interest. The worst thing in the world is to be a stand-up comic who bombs because he can't control himself or the room.

    Your friends might think you're funny, and you may very well be. But you need a lot of practice before you can easily make an audience of paying strangers who wish to see good stand-up comedy, laugh.
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    Aug 26, 2009 7:35 PM GMT
    It is great that you are putting yourself out there. A lot of people would not have the courage to do that. I did find your video a bit rambling though. I agree with Gulitygear that the "I am bi and like everything" was interesting. I am sure you could make a routine around that. Maybe something along the lines of "I am bi which means have an increase chance of getting laid"; Because I am Bi - and not an picky bisexual - I am hard all day long!" I am not a comedy writer (like you one couldn't tell) but just some suggestions to maybe give you something to think about. I would also suggest joining Toastmasters (public speaking group) - I know it ihas helped me a lot.
    http://www.toastmasters.org


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    Aug 26, 2009 7:37 PM GMT
    zeebyaboi saidSorry, friend, but when you said "There'll never be a boring moment" is when you lost me. The WHOLE THING, up to that point, WAS boring.

    Don't sit there in your room on your webcam TELLING us about how funny you are and how you want to make people laugh; SHOW US. Start out as if you're already on stage in the middle of your act. If you go onstage and start to tell us about yourself the way you did on the clip, nobody will be interested.

    Stand-up comedy is VERY DIFFICULT, especially for a beginner. The only exceptions I can think of are Robin Williams and Bill Cosby, and maybe George Carlin. They TOOK CONTROL of the room as soon as they walked out on that stage. From your video, you don't seem to show any of that kind of charisma, sorry to say.

    There are many approaches to stand-up: you can do the Henny Youngman thing and tell one-liners. You can do the Cosby thing, and tell stories from your own life that are funny, as well as universally honest. Many of us still laugh at Cosby's old routines because his childhood is similar to our own (in my generation, anyway). You can do the George Carlin or Eddie Murphy thing, and make pithy and outrageous observations on real life. Or you can do a funny character, like Andy Kaufmann, Stephen Wright, or Howie Mandel. There are many ways to approach stand-up, but most important is to be confident, and have a LOT of material, or at least be very fast on your feet. You MUST control the room, and fidgeting, and allowing your ADD to control you, will cause your audience to lose interest. The worst thing in the world is to be a stand-up comic who bombs because he can't control himself or the room.

    Your friends might think you're funny, and you may very well be. But you need a lot of practice before you can easily make an audience of paying strangers who wish to see good stand-up comedy, laugh.


    Good point about SHOWING us how funny you are and not just TELLING us.
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    Aug 26, 2009 7:45 PM GMT
    phemt said I would also suggest joining Toastmasters (public speaking group) - I know it ihas helped me a lot.
    http://www.toastmasters.org




    That's DAMN good advice. Learning the art of public speaking is one of the most useful educations you can get. Not only can it help you on stage, it can also help you should you ever find yourself in a real-life leadership role with others looking to you for guidance.
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    Aug 26, 2009 8:51 PM GMT
    spookyspoon saidAny feedback is appreciated, think I might have what it takes?


    I think everything said above is what you would need to work on. Your a cutie, so you have that part of it, I think all thats left is the public speaking. Its a very hard industry to crack. You have to show nothing but confidence. If your realistic about it, and can see that you an do it, and your passionate about it, go for it.
  • bigtallguy

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    Aug 27, 2009 3:40 AM GMT
    what exactly are you auditioning for?
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    Aug 27, 2009 3:46 AM GMT
    Yeah, agreed. Start right off with something funny; people won't waste time waiting for something to gain their interest. I've always found that situational comedy and life anecdotes are the funniest kinds of humor.

    Like maybe a routine of "You know how you can tell if someone is bi?"

    First joke,
    second joke
    third joke

    "So, I'm bi AND I have ADD. I just CAN'T seem to make up my mind."

    "How many people out there have ADD? You sir, come on up here. Let me test you to see if you really do have ADD. Ok, just stand there....for the entire length of the show. If he moves, he has ADD. Focus now, focus!"

    Ok, jokes need work, but people like to feel they know you and can connect with you.

  • bigtallguy

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    Aug 27, 2009 3:50 AM GMT
    bigtallguy saidwhat exactly are you auditioning for?


    nevermind. I realize now it is for a show called "Made"
    I have never heard of that so I just thought you accidentally wrote "made" twice in your title.
    sorry for my confusion. carry on.
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    Aug 27, 2009 3:53 AM GMT
    Oh here's something that may help out too in terms of public speaking:

    People in your audience WANT you to do well. That is why they came there, to see and be entertained by you. Just come out strong and confident for the first five minutes, and then it will be easy after that.

    Remember, they WANT you to do well. So give them what they want.