Need Some Help... Speaking at a Funeral

  • calibro

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    Mar 19, 2010 3:32 AM GMT
    My grandfather passed away this weekend and I am flying to Los Angeles for the funeral on Saturday. Being the writer of the family, my dad asked me write something for the service, which I am honored to do. The problem is I don't really write stuff I would want my family to read. I've put together a poem, but because it's not my style of writing, I was hoping I could get some input from you guys on whether it's appropriate. Just a bit of background, my grandfather had this brown leather jacket from back when he was in the navy that he gave to my dad who then gave it to me. The jacket is old, torn, faded, and too small to wear, but it still hangs in my closet. Thanks in advance.


    the brown leather cuffs my chest in
    a tight handshake whenever i flex
    my spine. its grip reminds me
    of how a pink smog sky will grab onto
    a sun after it sinks
    behind a grove of tomorrows that cannot bloom,
    how bristlecone pines are obstinate
    in death and therefore immortal
    if you stop paying attention,
    how magnets will forgive
    their differences in an embrace based on circumstance
    neither loses interest in, how
    an old wall pocked with holes will not buckle
    as breeze sifts through its
    pores, how a stain becomes part
    of the décor when the memory
    of who spilled the merlot
    on beige carpet
    becomes more
    important than why we bought carpet
    in the first place, how your faded jacket
    sometimes feels like a hug
    more than one-size
    too small.
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    Mar 19, 2010 7:31 AM GMT
    Title it "Granddad" (or whatever you called him in your family).

    I like it.
  • calibro

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    Mar 19, 2010 2:06 PM GMT
  • myklet1

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    Mar 19, 2010 8:30 PM GMT
    It's good..........and I agree with titling it with what you called your Grandfather
  • coolarmydude

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    Mar 19, 2010 8:51 PM GMT
    I hope you're bringing the jacket. Make sure it's displayed when you read the poem. It'll be great!!
  • Thaer

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    Mar 19, 2010 9:06 PM GMT
    First my deepest condolences to you and your family.
    for the poem ... I think it’s good … for me the fact that you remembered the jacket, is more than enough. sometimes emotions can speak louder than words ,,,, and I’m sure that when you say this poem your emotions will speak louder than your words ,,, funerals ( as I believe ) is all about creating the last moment of someone you care about that everyone will remember him for … and when you mention the word jacket .. Every one either will remember him wearing it or will visualize him wearing it (if they never saw him before in it ) .. In both cases I believe that since your grandfather was in the navy. Then these were the years that he was mostly proud of. The years that defined his life (I think that because this is how my uncle always speaks about his years in the army ) …