Just recorded my first OPENLY GAY track take a listen guys! tell me what you think! :)

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    Jun 03, 2010 4:23 PM GMT
    Hey Guys! I am a pop R&B recording artist in Toronto and I just recently started recording music again. This time around as an openly gay artist. My First track is called "Tease" take a listen and tell me what you think! i'd like to get some feedback on what the gay world thinks! Thanks your support is MUCH appreciated

    p.s any hate messages...please refrain and grow up!!! thanks! other wise constructive criticism is always welcome!


    CHEERS!
    Pawan

  • allamathlete

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    Jun 03, 2010 7:50 PM GMT
    at first i listened to it on my laptop and it sounded ok... but after i plugged it into my stereo it sounds pretty good. in some ways your voice kinda makes me think of a cross between a george michael and jon b. (i like both of their voices).
    i think it's kind of in an in between zone as far as the sound/music not quite r&b not quite pop. to appeal to the r&b fans you have to get a more innovative urban sound if that makes sense... overall it sounds pretty good. kudos for putting yourself out there though!.
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    Jun 03, 2010 8:04 PM GMT
    Thanks for the feedback man, i hear ya! much appreciated! icon_smile.gif
  • inuman

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    Jun 03, 2010 8:13 PM GMT
    I liked the beat but the lyrics were a little to vague as to who you were singing to, if that makes sense.

    Also I looked and saw your Canadian icon_cool.gif but there is another artist who is also in the same area of music as you and maybe you might wanna give her a shout.

    Her website is http://www.trakdiamondrecords.com/home.cfm

    I bought her first album and I enjoyed it a lot.

    Cheers and congrats on the song making matey icon_cool.gif
  • jonhyboy

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    Jun 03, 2010 8:14 PM GMT
    Great voice!!! I like the song! icon_biggrin.gif
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    Jun 03, 2010 8:27 PM GMT
    Thanks guys!

    I'll check out the site inuman, yeah i wanted it to be vague, cause that way it wouldn't have been IN YOUR FACE gay, you'd have to really listen to the lyrics to know if I'm singing about a man or a woman.
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    Jun 03, 2010 9:31 PM GMT
    Thanks man! much appreciated! I'm gonna take it to the stage this summer, i got back up dancers too ;)
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    Jun 03, 2010 10:00 PM GMT
    Great song! Too bad I'm outta town and don't have access to my Bose to jam out with it.
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    Jun 03, 2010 10:24 PM GMT
    thanks Paul! you better pump it on that Bose system! haha
  • toybrian

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    Jun 03, 2010 11:10 PM GMT
    good job man..it ounded good and hope that when you get the show together that you will record it and put that on here with the dancers and all...lyrics wise it was good and liked the sound...keep up the good work and wish you well in your ventures in the recording industry....
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    Jun 03, 2010 11:23 PM GMT
    I'm not into dance/club music, but that's good stuff, kudos brother!
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    Jun 03, 2010 11:23 PM GMT
    Sounds great although I am more into country.... Good job dude. Hope it does well!
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    Jun 03, 2010 11:45 PM GMT
    you have a nice voice,but I just thought the song was just too plain. It was the same thing over and over again,which got boring after awhile.
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    Jun 04, 2010 12:00 AM GMT
    crazycool saidthanks Paul! you better pump it on that Bose system! haha
    You bet! I have extremely discriminating taste is sound. Can't stand the sound of this stupid little netbook. It screeches in my ears. icon_lol.gif
  • Tavix

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    Jun 04, 2010 12:31 AM GMT
    Great. Go ahead and do you. It is great and shows that you have great potential. I look forward to hearing more from you in the large entertainment arena.
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    Jun 04, 2010 4:45 AM GMT
    Thanks guys! much appreciated! icon_smile.gif CHEERS!

    Lenox: thanks for the feedback bud! will be more careful of that next time icon_smile.gif
  • coastguy90814

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    Jun 04, 2010 4:55 AM GMT
    Good luck man! Okay my honest feed back was it was a little repetitive and to be quite honest it doesn't sound like anything new and the beat was just okay. I'd like to hear your voice on a different track but the song for me was just mediocre. All the best.
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    Jun 04, 2010 1:33 PM GMT
    thanks for the input coastguy! cheers!
  • Geoedward

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    Jun 04, 2010 3:01 PM GMT
    Hi, I just listened to it. Great job. I would buy it. Good Luck!!!!!!!!!!!!
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    Jun 04, 2010 3:53 PM GMT
    Thanks man MUCH LOVE!
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    Jun 16, 2010 8:59 PM GMT
    Just sent the song to a dj i know to be REMIX into a Tribal House Track!!! icon_biggrin.gif what do you think? would it be good remixed into a house track?
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    Jun 22, 2010 8:36 AM GMT
    hey Pawan-bhai (or Dai icon_razz.gif)!

    Well, Im gonna give you my opinion based on the artists I worked with and my own productions.. based on the style your singing in and what I think you should keep or improve on, but remember its still outside opinion and you as the artist have all final say!!!

    As for voice: melody line of the song is good... keep the melody line, its catchy and will make a listener interested, what I would do is work on your adlibs (they are the hardest, im still perfecting those myself), you need more of them really, by adding slight variations in th middle (subtle) and then really going off at the endd, you have a good build-up


    Production: I would say with the style your going for...the beat is good, I like the beat, but you need a break at the end of every stanza.... fro example, like drop the beat, play a short variation on "tease" (for example, with a distortion on it), then drop the beat back in. This has the effect of making the beat more interesting, and its more danceable with the breaks and all...

    I would like a tadd more voice tracks in the background (especially highs and lows, use extra singers if need be), and bring out the ones you have more, to get a real full choral feel going... Like you should have in soul music... I would say take micheal jackson as example, hes the king icon_smile.gif

    Hope that helped in any way....
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    Jun 22, 2010 9:07 AM GMT
    Not my cuppa but not bad. A little more production and vocal stylizing and arrangements might make it stand out more. The beat just kind of putters along and the vocals work off 3 notes it seems. But I guess that's the foundation for pop/R&B which is why it's not my favorite genre.
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    Jun 22, 2010 10:19 AM GMT
    I usually have nothing but negative things to say, but I'm hard-pressed to trash this one. It's not great, but it's far from Gaga horrible (I kid). I like it.
  • Buddha

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    Jun 22, 2010 10:54 AM GMT
    I liked this a lot, I hope you keep making more icon_smile.gif